I am a Year 4 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 12. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Today we were doing persuasive writing. We were doing the best season, and I think it is spring. I hope you now like spring and have a good day. See you later in post.- Sadia.
Kia ora Sadia, it's Moira. I loved reading your persuasive writing it made me smile and reminded me of all the reasons why I enjoy spring too. When you mentioned how the car seats can get really hot in Summer I remembered getting burnt legs as a child from the hot, leather chairs. Where did you get all the ideas for your writing? There were so many.
Kia ora Sadia its Naomi. Wow good job, I liked that you mentioned how baby animals grow in spring. Your reasons for liking spring were very persuasive. Perhaps you could mention the blossums on the trees and the different colour of blossums. Keep Safe keep blogging am looking forward to reading your next piece of writing.
Hi Sadia it's Fiona from the office. What a lovely piece of writing about your favourite season. The picture of daffodils really reminds me of my house in Scotland where we had hundreds of them planted. You are right it is nice to have more daylight hours to spend with our family. Do you know why we get different seasons? Maybe you could try and find out.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughul - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia ora Sadia, it's Moira. I loved reading your persuasive writing it made me smile and reminded me of all the reasons why I enjoy spring too. When you mentioned how the car seats can get really hot in Summer I remembered getting burnt legs as a child from the hot, leather chairs. Where did you get all the ideas for your writing? There were so many.
ReplyDeleteI got some from Google and some I just thought of.
DeleteKia ora Sadia its Naomi. Wow good job, I liked that you mentioned how baby animals grow in spring. Your reasons for liking spring were very persuasive. Perhaps you could mention the blossums on the trees and the different colour of blossums. Keep Safe keep blogging am looking forward to reading your next piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteHi Sadia it's Fiona from the office. What a lovely piece of writing about your favourite season. The picture of daffodils really reminds me of my house in Scotland where we had hundreds of them planted. You are right it is nice to have more daylight hours to spend with our family. Do you know why we get different seasons? Maybe you could try and find out.
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